The Final End Of the Semester

#1 Explain one or two ways your writing has improved over the semester. Include a few examples from your posts over time, with analysis, to illustrate how the improvement(s) happened.

  As time progressed through the semester, I had written posts for my blog. With the support of my friends and family, I was able to write from the heart. In the beginning I thought I wanted to write about jokes, music, and friends. But, I kept on running into writers block in the middle of paragraphs. This excerpt is from my first blog:

As a young child living on the island city of Alameda, I hear a strange beat being busted out from a guy standing on the corner. growing up with country and Spanish radio, these songs were something new to me. Not until i was six did i hear my first hip hop, reggae, and R&B. Learning that there were more flavors of music out in the world, I began listing to all kinds of music. Now i plan to blog about every kind of music i listen to.

Instead, I chose to write about my life and how the people around me act. If you notice in my first blog, the sentences are choppy and a way to fill in the requirements. I was acting lazy, even though I could have been stronger at making them flow. Progressing through the year, I upgraded my writing. This quote is from my October 16th, 2009 This Post:

Beep! Beep! Beep! waking up on the Friday, picture day, and an away game for the Hornets. Wow. It is strange to think if your day is going good that it can turn the other way so fast. Waking up refreshed and ready for the game, I get dressed, brush my teeth, and pack my lunch. As I am sleep walking to school after my seminary class, I go into the main building, and fall asleep. Hearing footsteps I open my eyes and I am blinded by the light. I rub my face and go to Mr. Sutherland's class. I talked to him about how I would have to leave before fifth period started for the game. I went along with my daily schedule. History, Introduction to computers, Algebra 2, Spanish 3, and along came lunch.

In this section, the quote is beginning to build 'I talked to him about how I would have to leave before fifth period started for the game', this show the fluidity of my writing. My blog has been improving every month, I am taking excerpts to show that my writing truly did improve. I am being the historian for my own biography, which is surprising to notice I have a different life then I thought I had. This excerpt is from the December 4th, 2009 blog named 30,000 more?:

The things we SEE AND HEAR ARE THE THINGS HE WANTS US TO SEE AND HEAR. As we make the choice to live on the ideas the send to us through the government, I believe that we can find the truth through the Internet. As I write they are preparing to send 30,000 troops in six or less months to Afghanistan. Some say that this will fix our economy, but I believe that it was and is destroying our economy, because we have been in this war for eight years and the economy has only gotten so bad that it was close to a great depression. I think we should let go of Afghanistan, and let our troops come home.

The process of which my blog was written, simulates the actual event by having a statement that creates a controlling effect known as "hooking" someone into your writing. Without changing the topic for your interest grabber is a difficult thing. As my vocabulary expands my writing becomes simpler to do, and easier to read. In the latest work, I created a mesh of thoughts, that came out to make a depressing story:

The other day I was asked by my English teacher to do a quick write with something that ended with the phrase "she touched the box in her pocket and smiled." I took the challenge to write a short story on what it can be about. I thought about Jewelry and cookies, or a retainer, but then it hit me that you will read what I wrote; no corrections, and no rewording.

By the end of the semester my writing has improved from adequate to fantastic. When it came to my attention, you could compare and contrast the many differences between the first blogs and the latest ones.The main portions of writing that improved were vocabulary and the fluidity.

How do the things you read influence what you write about or how you write it?

I read from many different sources such as magazines, books, and blogs. When reading adult novels you establish a completely distinctive vocabulary that can aid you writing and contribute new words for rhymes.Books by Clive Cussler are the main novels I read; because the main plots surround oceanic activities such as biology experiments, treasure, certain death, make the readings more enjoyable. Some of the writings I have done simulate the many books and magazine articles. I used the many blogs as an inspiration to express my emotions through lyrics in my raps, in my songs, and in my blogs.Some of my favorite blog post were by my friend Marlas. He was able to recreate the many experiences he had, and some of them I even done but in my point of view.
Even though some people do not like to read books, I love reading books that are adventurous. Even those so-called "chick" books are good; I started to read the Twilight series, but it sometimes, is hard to get into "falling in love with a guy who is really a vampire". Some of the ways I mimic the style of the people I read from, is to try it in quick writes. I tried almost all of them; only past tense, only future, and only negative writing. They all proved unsuccessful. I know now that I do not need to mimic someone else's style but to use my own.